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The health benefits of physical activities are well known. Despite this, many people do not exercise regularly. What are the reasons for this? What could be done to encourage them exercise regularly?

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In the modern world, many
people
 do not
exercise
 in everyday
life
 ,but
exercise
 is very good for health.
In addition
, most
people
 do not want to do
exercise
 because of many things like busy
life
 and others. Anyway, I think we have many ways to support them to do physical
activities
 and show the positives of
sports
activities
.
This
 essay will discuss the reasons and how to support them to
exercise
 every day. The first idea that comes to mind is the government can support them in
sports
activities
.
Secondly
, schools much teach students the value of physical
activities
,
for example
, governments and schools can show students in the class like bodies of
people
 who always
exercise
 regularly.
On the other hand
, in many nations around the world, many
people
 have many reasons that make them not have time to do
sports
activities
 like being busy time and hard-working ,many
people
 only focus on their success in
life
 ,but they do not care about their health.
Moreover
, at present many
people
 think that
sports
activities
 are not important and the most important thing is money, so they prefer to find more money than
exercise
 and it is a very big problem for many
people
 who can not
exercise
.
To sum up
, I totally believe that
exercise
 is very positive in our
life
 because
exercise
 can make our
life
 better ,healthy and relaxed so, I would like to recommend everyone to do
exercise
 and it is not important to do
exercise
 every day only 3-4 days is enough for our bodies.
Also
, I believe that you will have a long
life
 if you do
exercise
.
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