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The graph shows oil production capacity for several Gulf countries between 1990 and 2010.

The graph shows oil production capacity for several Gulf countries between 1990 and 2010.
The bar chart compares the amount of
oil
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 produced by multiple Gulf nations in the years 1990,2000,2005 and 2010.
It is clear that
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Saudi
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Arabia
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 produced the highest amount of
oil
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,
while
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Qatar
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 had the lowest
production
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 levels during the given period.
Saudi
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Arabia
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 experienced the biggest rise in
production
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,
whereas
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 the
production
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 levels in other countries stayed relatively constant. In 1990,
Saudi
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Arabia
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 generated over 8
million
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barrels
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 of
oil
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 per day, making it the main
oil
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-producing country and producing 8 times more
oil
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 than
Qatar
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. Over the following decade, both
Saudi
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Arabia
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 and
Qatar
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 saw a slight increase in
production
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.
However
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, just five years later,
Saudi
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Arabia
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's
production
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 figure climbed sharply and surpassed 14
million
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barrels
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 per day by 2010. Meanwhile,
Qatar
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's
oil
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production
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initially
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 fell
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 and has remained stable the
last
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 decade. The other four
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-generating countries were Iran, Iraq, Kuwait, and the UAE. In 2009, each of these nations produced about 2
million
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barrels
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 of
oil
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, and they followed a similar pattern of gradual increase over the 20-year period.
However
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, by 2010, their individual
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production
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 had just reached around 4
million
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barrels
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 each.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words oil, saudi, arabia, qatar, production, million, barrels with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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