Some sports are extremely dangerous but many people still like them very much. Why do people take part in dangerous sports? Give some suggestions on how to deal with these dangers. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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outdoor activities are more fancy and trending jobs nowadays making the adrenaline rush into the human being for those who are doing that sport or

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an expensive adventure of my life.

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outdoor sports are dangerous at some point but society always

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these sports streams if it is held in proper support facilities and equipped with safety hazards it

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they may cause extreme loss of lives

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