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Many say that social medias badly effect to the youths What are the causes of this suggest some solutions Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge and experience.

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In the modern world, many
people
 think that social
media
 are negative for children ,
for example
, crime, health and others and it is many causes for
this
 situation.
This
 essay will discuss the bad things that the
internet
 can affect young
people
 in the present day. The first idea that comes to mind is
internet
 social is very harmful to many
students
 because some of them spent many times on the
internet
 like someone spent more than 8 hours per day.
Secondly
, young
people
 can search for many things on the website ,so it is very dangerous for them to find bad things.
In addition
, social
media
 can affect many
students
 in health ,
for example
, some
students
 are very fat because they sit for a long time with their smartphones or laptops.
On the other hand
, many
people
 always think that the
Internet
 is very useful and everyone needs to
use
 it as we
use
 it for work and study.
Also
,I saw that in the Covic-19 the
internet
 is very important for us
students
 and schools
use
 the
internet
 for teaching and learning and many companies
use
 the
internet
 for work.
To sum up
, I totally agree that social
media
 are very beneficial for us because we
use
 the
internet
 in everyday life ,
for example
, online learning and working from home.
In contrast
, social
media
 are very dangerous if
people
 do not know how to
use
 them, so I think the most important thing that we can solve
this
 problem is government must control it and teach children
in
Change preposition
apply
show examples
good and bad about the
internet
.
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