The diagram details the process of making leather products. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The diagram shows the way in which leather goods are produced to become luxurious for humans.
Overall
, it is clear that
there are 11 stages in the process,beginning with drying the animal skin
and culminating in production.
To begin
, the animal skin
is dried in an open area where full of sun. This
animal skin
is then
transported to the factory by truck. Then
, the animal skin
is put into a container by adding water and lime to remove the dirt. Next,
lime is added to another container to soak the animal skin
and remove the fat. After that, a rolling machine is used to flatten the surface of the skin
and make the process easier afterwards. Later, the flattened skin
is soaked in a liquid mixture of water and vegetable matter to preserve the skin
. In the subsequent stage, the skin
is polished by a polish machine to make the skin
more smoother and then
delivered to the factory. Finally
, the animal skin
is manufactured into products such
as bags, sports equipment and shoes.Submitted by s_syedy on
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
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