The diagram details the process of making leather products. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The diagram details the process of making leather products.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The diagram shows the way in which leather goods are produced to become luxurious for humans.
Overall
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it is clear that
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there are 11 stages in the process,beginning with drying the animal
skin
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and culminating in production.
To begin
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, the animal
skin
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is dried in an open area where full of sun.
This
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animal
skin
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is
then
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transported to the factory by truck.
Then
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, the animal
skin
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is put into a container by adding water and lime to remove the dirt.
Next,
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lime is added to another container to soak the animal
skin
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and remove the fat. After that, a rolling machine is used to flatten the surface of the
skin
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and make the process easier afterwards. Later, the flattened
skin
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is soaked in a liquid mixture of water and vegetable matter to preserve the
skin
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. In the subsequent stage, the
skin
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is polished by a polish machine to make the
skin
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more smoother and
then
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delivered to the factory.
Finally
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, the animal
skin
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is manufactured into products
such
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as bags, sports equipment and shoes.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words skin with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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