The diagram details the process of making leather products. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The diagram shows the way in which leather goods are produced to become luxurious for humans.
Overall
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it is clear that
there are 11 stages in the process,beginning with drying the animal Linking Words
skin
and culminating in production.
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To begin
, the animal Linking Words
skin
is dried in an open area where full of sun. Use synonyms
This
animal Linking Words
skin
is Use synonyms
then
transported to the factory by truck. Linking Words
Then
, the animal Linking Words
skin
is put into a container by adding water and lime to remove the dirt. Use synonyms
Next,
lime is added to another container to soak the animal Linking Words
skin
and remove the fat. After that, a rolling machine is used to flatten the surface of the Use synonyms
skin
and make the process easier afterwards. Later, the flattened Use synonyms
skin
is soaked in a liquid mixture of water and vegetable matter to preserve the Use synonyms
skin
. In the subsequent stage, the Use synonyms
skin
is polished by a polish machine to make the Use synonyms
skin
more smoother and Use synonyms
then
delivered to the factory. Linking Words
Finally
, the animal Linking Words
skin
is manufactured into products Use synonyms
such
as bags, sports equipment and shoes.Linking Words
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