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Some people believe that online study is more effective that on campus while others disagree. Discuss both the disadvantages and advantages of online study.

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Some people believe that online study is more effective than on campus when
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 method becomes popular.
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 essay will discuss the benefits and drawbacks of
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 trend. On the one hand, there are several reasons why studying online is beneficial. One of the main advantages of
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 is convenience.
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 method can be beneficial for students who want to spend
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 studying when they have jobs. It provides the flexibility to organize
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 and space, they can study at their home with their schedule.
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registered
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English
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 class in 4 weeks, but the schedule
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 coincides with the roster of my work, so learning through Zoom with flexible
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help
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 me adapt easily
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 and study balance. Another factor can be that it’s easy to access
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learning resources. When studying on campus, it takes
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 for students to find books and documents in the library but with online courses, they can approach more quickly the huge resources of online documents through websites,
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, using online tools helps them develop technology skills those very useful in life.
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, there are a number of disadvantages of online learning that people should take
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. One
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 drawback is technical issues. Internet connection, audio,
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and video
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are interacted
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 they are studying, or sometimes, devices are broken so they can attend
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class. Another negative effect is that spending too much
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 in front of
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 can cause
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 problems
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, tired eyes, etc. In conclusion, learning online could bring about certain benefits , but its negative consequences should not be overlooked. Students should consider which method
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 for their goals and needs.
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