Because of the negative effects on health of an inactive lifestyle, all university students and school children should be forced to do sports activities at least 3 times per week. Do you agree? Write your argumentative essay.

Todays
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world
mostly
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most
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of people
lifestyle
are
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moderately inactive . in my
opinion
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the peoples are not active
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because
of
the
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work style and
there
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environmental
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. nowadays people don't have time to do
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exercise
even walking and running.
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paragraph
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regarding
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it. To commence with , there are a number of arguments in favour of my belief. the most prominent one is that the university and schools
deberatively
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deliberatively
concerntrating
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concentrating
physical education.In order
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student interest campus will provide some facilities like
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a gym
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, indoor play court ,
swimming
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and swimming
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pool to concentrate cardio. in my
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mainly proper use will
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to move forward
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healthy
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a healthy
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life.
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our folks have some habits like playing with friends in
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their
leisure time.
on the other hand
, critics may
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point
out that
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one
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of the most significant disadvantages of the inactive
lifestyle
is
that
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not utilizing all the
faclities
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facilities
properly . Nowadays
lifestyle
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lifestyles
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totally changed
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after the pandemic people are met
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,
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and every
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every one
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have
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own
scenerio
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scenario
to do unactive work like playing
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games
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full day and
skeeping
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keeping
sleeping
whatever time etc.For
that
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we need to monitor the
activties
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activities
to overcome
this
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issues. For
insance
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instance
, a survey conducted in the united states reveals that making the schedule for educating
the
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physicall
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physical
education
importance
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to all the
student
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students
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and
also
providing
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separate
mentor
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mentors
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or
coach
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coaches
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to
guidence
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guidance
guide
the students.
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universities
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struggling
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these issue
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so that
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they
planned
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to
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.
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, even when there
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are
lot
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of demerits associated with
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apply
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in
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an
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active
lifestyle
. the
advanges
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advantages
outweigh the
disadavnages
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disadvantages
, and
active
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an active
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lifestyle
has become a crucial part of our life.
Therefore
efficient uses of all
facilies
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facilities
provided by the universities to decrease the
inactice
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inactive
active
lifestyle
should be promoted.
however
,its misuse should be
condemmed
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condemned
. in my
beliew
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belief
, the universities taken
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is
better
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a better
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way to run the healthy life
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