Because of the negative effects on health of an inactive lifestyle, all university students and school children should be forced to do sports activities at least 3 times per week. Do you agree? Write your argumentative essay.

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are
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moderately inactive . in my
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the peoples are not active
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condition
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conditions

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. nowadays people don't have time to do
excercise
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even walking and running.
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consequence
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regarding
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it. To commence with , there are a number of arguments in favour of my belief. the most prominent one is that the university and schools
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concerntrating
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physical education.In order
maintain
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student interest campus will provide some facilities like
gym
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, indoor play court ,
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and swimming

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pool to concentrate cardio. in my
thinking
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mainly proper use will
tends
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to move forward
for
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healthy
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a healthy

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life.
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Moreover
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our folks have some habits like playing with friends in
thier
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leisure time.
on the other hand
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, critics may
piont
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out that
on
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one

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of the most significant disadvantages of the inactive
lifestyle
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is
that
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apply

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not utilizing all the
faclities
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facilities

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properly . Nowadays
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lifestyle
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lifestyles

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totally changed
lot
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after the pandemic people are met
regular
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,
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every one
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have
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own
scenerio
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scenario

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to do unactive work like playing
game
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games

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full day and
skeeping
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keeping
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whatever time etc.For
that
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we need to monitor the
activties
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activities

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to overcome
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this
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issues. For
insance
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instance

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, a survey conducted in the united states reveals that making the schedule for educating
the
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physicall
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education
importance
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to all the
student
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and
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providing
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mentor
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or
coach
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coaches

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guidence
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the students.
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universities
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for
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these issue
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so that
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they
planned
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overcome
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, even when there
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lot
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of demerits associated with
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in
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active
lifestyle
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advantages

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outweigh the
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lifestyle
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has become a crucial part of our life.
Therefore
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efficient uses of all
facilies
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facilities

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provided by the universities to decrease the
inactice
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inactive
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lifestyle
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should be promoted.
however
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,its misuse should be
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belief

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, the universities taken
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better
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way to run the healthy life
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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