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many countries are expanding their tourist industries. it is a positive or negative trend.

#countries #tourist #industries #trend
the
tourism
 industry has been playing an important role in the growth of several countries, In my opinion,
this
 tendency can bring numerous benefits to many countries
such
 as economic and
knowledge
,
thus
 I believe that
this
 is beneficial development. On the one hand, it is reasonable for some individuals to oppose the advancement of
tourism
 as it can adversely impact the environment since when many
people
 travel to a new destination, some of them, are unaware of protecting nature,
thus
 they can throw a large amount of garbage which can cause negative to the environment, losing the natural beauty of those destinations. Another disadvantage is when welcoming a huge number of tourists, residents have to share living space and suffer from countless problems
such
 as noise pollution and cultural disruption.
Consequently
, the advancement of
tourism
 often considers a negative tendency for many
people
.
However
, despite mentioned negative drawbacks, I believe that
tourism
 can help
country's
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a country's
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 development,
such
 as economics and
knowledge
. Regarding
financial
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, when numerous tourists travel to a place it can help
locals
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local
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 inhabitants sell their products and offer various services which can help them enhance their incomes.
In addition
,
tourism
 can help
people
 boost their horizons of
knowledge
 from the foreigner about language
proficient
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 and other skills.
for
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 example, Thailand is
the
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a
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 country famous for
tourism
, local
people
has
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 welcomed millions of international guests annually,
this
 not only boosts their economy but
also
 enhance their
knowledge
. In conclusion,
although
tourism
 can cause some negative, I think that the economy and social merits are worth concern more.
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