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many countries are expanding their tourist industries. it is a positive or negative trend.

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the
tourism
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 industry has been playing an important role in the growth of several countries, In my opinion,
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 tendency can bring numerous benefits to many countries
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 as economic and
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,
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 I believe that
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 is beneficial development. On the one hand, it is reasonable for some individuals to oppose the advancement of
tourism
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 as it can adversely impact the environment since when many
people
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 travel to a new destination, some of them, are unaware of protecting nature,
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 they can throw a large amount of garbage which can cause negative to the environment, losing the natural beauty of those destinations. Another disadvantage is when welcoming a huge number of tourists, residents have to share living space and suffer from countless problems
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, the advancement of
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 often considers a negative tendency for many
people
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.
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, despite mentioned negative drawbacks, I believe that
tourism
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 can help
country's
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 development,
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 as economics and
knowledge
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. Regarding
financial
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, when numerous tourists travel to a place it can help
locals
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 inhabitants sell their products and offer various services which can help them enhance their incomes.
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,
tourism
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 can help
people
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 boost their horizons of
knowledge
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 from the foreigner about language
proficient
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 and other skills.
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for
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For
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 example, Thailand is
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 country famous for
tourism
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, local
people
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has
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 welcomed millions of international guests annually,
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 not only boosts their economy but
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 enhance their
knowledge
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. In conclusion,
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tourism
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 can cause some negative, I think that the economy and social merits are worth concern more.

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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