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Many individuals think that exchanging

information

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as much as possible in some areas

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as science, business, and the academic world has advantages. But

others

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say that sharing freely some

information

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is wrong because some of them are too vital or too valuable. And I think it is true that some

information

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should not be shared freely. sharing

information

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for free is not a good

idea

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for several reasons.

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, some

people

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are talented in some areas like scientific research and they spend almost their whole life in labs to discover medicines or other things. In that

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they have to spend a lot of money on their experiments to get

their

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right results. So, if they

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their results for free, how can they earn money to pay their bills?

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, some of them do not have any other sources to earn money.

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, some

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and inventions in businesses make a difference in their products or services that lead to more

people

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buying or using them and

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a lot of financial

benefit

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, if they

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their knowledge for free, they might not be able to compete with other companies.

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, for these

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it is not a good

idea

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some

information

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for free. But sharing some

information

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freely has its own advantages. Some knowledge is not very important and if

people

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it, it has a good influence on society. The key role is that

people

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must learn to

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their useful knowledge

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others

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. If

people

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do that, in the long term society might be more dynamic.

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, in small groups

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university

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students have different skills that some don't have, like time management. Sharing some useful

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and tips in time management to

others

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, makes other teammates work more efficiently or be more productive. In conclusion, some

people

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say that sharing

information

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is a very good

idea

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and individuals should do it as much as they can. But,

others

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like me think that it is not a good

idea

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information

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for free.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.5

Complete response

6.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

343 words

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some people believe that it is good to share as muc information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely.

Fully explain your ideas

Some people believe the professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Schools should focus on academic success and passing examinations. Skills such as cookery, dressmaking and woodwork should not be taught at school as it is better to learn these from family and friends. To that extent do you agree or disagree.

In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?