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some people believe that it is good to share as muc information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely.

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Many individuals think that exchanging
information
 as much as possible in some areas
such
 as science, business, and the academic world has advantages. But
others
 say that sharing freely some
information
 is wrong because some of them are too vital or too valuable. And I think it is true that some
information
 should not be shared freely. sharing
information
 for free is not a good
idea
 for several reasons.
Firstly
, some
people
 are talented in some areas like scientific research and they spend almost their whole life in labs to discover medicines or other things. In that
way
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 they have to spend a lot of money on their experiments to get
their
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the
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 right results. So, if they
share
 their results for free, how can they earn money to pay their bills?
Moreover
, some of them do not have any other sources to earn money.
Secondly
, some
information
 and inventions in businesses make a difference in their products or services that lead to more
people
 buying or using them and
make
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making
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 a lot of financial
benefit
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.
However
, if they
share
 their knowledge for free, they might not be able to compete with other companies.
Therefore
, for these
reasons
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 it is not a good
idea
 to
share
 some
information
 for free. But sharing some
information
 freely has its own advantages. Some knowledge is not very important and if
people
share
 it, it has a good influence on society. The key role is that
people
 must learn to
share
 their useful knowledge
to
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with
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others
. If
people
 do that, in the long term society might be more dynamic.
For example
, in small groups
in
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at
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university
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,university
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 students have different skills that some don't have, like time management. Sharing some useful
information
 and tips in time management to
others
, makes other teammates work more efficiently or be more productive. In conclusion, some
people
 say that sharing
information
 is a very good
idea
 and individuals should do it as much as they can. But,
others
 like me think that it is not a good
idea
 to
share
information
 for free.
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