Deforestation caused by human activity is happening in many parts of the world, with serious results for the environment. What do you think can be done to solve this problem?

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Is not a secret to anyone that the destruction of vast areas, like the Amazon, is directly affecting the environment. One of the main reasons is collecting wood from forests which results in killing biodiversity. In order to improve

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situation international and national organizations are taking action against it.

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, Indigenous populations all over the world are being affected because of the appropriation of their lands.

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, recently, one of the isolated tribes living in the heart of the Amazon jungle in Peru killed a businessman and his crew who were visiting some lands they bought from the government. These areas were under Indigenous control and were supposed to be protected,

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, the governors illegally sold them. I think is crystal clear that these people were only trying to protect their habitat,

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the others wanted to become wealthier;

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, new regulations should be applied to protect them.

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, deforestation is causing biodiversity loss,

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forcing it to disappear the second most important natural system for carbon dioxide capture.

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, in Indonesia, entire forests are being burnt so palm oil can be produced,

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, flora and fauna are endangered causing a domino effect that degrades the whole ecosystem.

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, massive awareness campaigns led by activists and famous personalities concerned about

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problem are reaching crowds all over the world creating consciousness. I consider that if global organizations play a more active role in

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situation giving it the importance that it has by promoting new measures, it could be easier to solve it. To summarize, I believe that politicians and relevant charges should ask for corporate responsibility and apply new policies to reforest the areas that have been damaged,

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invest in more sustainable lifestyles.

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Your essay incorporates relevant examples, particularly the specific cases of Peru and Indonesia.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

295 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Deforestation
Biodiversity
Afforestation
Reforestation
Sustainable/sustainability
Urbanization
Timber
Infrastructure
Indigenous populations
Climate change
Ecosystem services
Ecotourism
Biodegradable
Renewable resources
Carbon footprint
Conservation
Environmental degradation
Habitat destruction
Enforcement
Regulation
Awareness campaigns
Corporate responsibility
Supply chains
Illegal logging
Satellite monitoring

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Deforestation caused by human activity is happening in many parts of the world, with serious results for the environment. What do you think can be done to solve this problem?

Your opinion

Some people think that the internet has brought people closer together while others think that people and communities are become more isolated. Discuss both sides and give you opinion.

Schools should focus on academic success and passing examinations. Skills such as cookery, dressmaking and woodwork should not be taught at school as it is better to learn these from family and friends. To that extent do you agree or disagree.

Children find it difficult to concentrate or pay attention at school. what are the reasons?how can we solve this problem?

Many people believe that social networking sites (such as facebook)have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society?To what extent do you agree? In the current world, The usage of technology is constantly on the rise.