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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying.

#future #nobody #newspapers #books
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Nowadays, there were more and more
people
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 read articles online rather than buying printed ones.
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, there were still some
people
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 prefer to buy printed newspapers or
books
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.
Moreover
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,
people
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 could not find all of
literature
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the literature
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 online
especially
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,especially
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 without paying.
Therefore
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, I disagree that there
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 nobody purchasing printed items and could read everything they want online without charge. It was convenient to read news or
books
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 on the internet,
nonetheless
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, there were still some
people
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used
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who used
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 to read printed products. For those
people
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 who loved the stories of the
books
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 might buy them as their collections. Some elders were used to
read
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 printed newspapers as their daily routine. It was harmful
for
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 younger children to use electronic items,
thus
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 their parents would choose printed
books
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 for them.
Hence
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, printed products would always be needed
although
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 there were other ways to read. There were some reasons that
people
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were
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hoped to pay for their reading products. In order to provide the public
better
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with better
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 articles, companies needed to spend more time and money to do more research or create better stories.
On the other hand
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, some
books
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 that were printed many years ago might not have an electronic version, libraries needed to hire employees to scan them and put the electronic
books
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 on the websites. It needed plenty of money to offer the public more kinds of excellent reading material.
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,
people
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 were able to pay for what they wanted to read. Printed items were essential, and the public might pay for those things they needed. Since
people
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 could read literature online, there were still some groups of
people
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preferred
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who preferred
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 printed materials.
Moreover
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, no matter
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whether the
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 newspapers and
books
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 were printed or shown online,
people
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 might pay money to obtain the things they wanted.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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