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Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools. Discuss both these views and give your opinion

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It is often argued that children could get better results from learning in separate academies
while
 others disagree and think that mixed ones are more effective.
While
 separate seminaries can exclude disrupted male-female interactions and
thus
 teach pupils more effectively, I believe that its mixed counterpart is more successful in
overall
 education which consists not only of tuition lessons but of socializing issues. On the one hand, there are several pluses of studying in a separate academy,
such
 as a better focus on studying and less time vesting on dating. The results in schooling as long as in any other process, strongly depend on the ability of its participants to stay focused, since
this
 type excludes problems with male-female relations,
therefore
 it is considered to be more effective.
For instance
, Russian separated military seminary graduate recruitment with excellent knowledge in math, physics and other technical disciplines and they usually gain many prizes in scholarship competitions.
On the other hand
, mixed secondary schools do not only teach subjects but
also
,
in addition
, experience their recruitment with multiple social interactions in the presence of opposite-gender persons.
This
 is why their scholars, who passed through many challenges,
finally
 gain more psychological experience and
thus
 can overtake their separate academy counterparts in future adult life.
For example
, collocating the number of separate seminaries now and 200 years ago you can notice that only a small amount of them still exist, many of which are religious or military,
this
 decline clearly proves the findings of
this
 essay. In conclusion, despite the apparent efficiency of separated seminaries in teaching their students with particular items, mixed ones are more effective in the
overall
 teaching process.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • co-education
  • gender segregation
  • peer pressure
  • academic performance
  • gender stereotypes
  • discrimination
  • social skills
  • teamwork
  • collaboration
  • diversity
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