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nowadays more and more people decide to have children later in their life. what are the reason? what are the effects on society and family life?

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Currently, the number of men and women who make a decision to have a toddler later in their
life
 increases significantly.
This
 trend has many reasons
such
 as the economic
crisis
moreover
, a rising average of old is a negative aspect of that. In
this
 essay, I intend to explain the reason and effects of that in
society
 and family. On the one hand, there are those who subscribe to the view that the economic
crisis
 is a decisive factor
to
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in
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 delay to have
a
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children
a child
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children
 in their
life
. From
this
 point of view, they insist that the high costs of parturition, schools , feeding and clothes of
children
 prohibit
parents
 to have
children
 sooner in their lifetime.
In contrast
 of that, the low wage is another factor
for
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in
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 their decision.
Furthermore
,governments usually do not have a pleasant plan to support families when they have an infant and after that. consequence, the
parents
 prefer to have a kid when have a better economic condition.
On the other hand
, many experts justifiably argue that there are many disadvantages for
society
 and families when
parents
 birth
child
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a child
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at in
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in
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an
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 older age. They believe one of the problems for families is the age difference between
parents
 and
children
. that trend has a negative effect on the training of
children
 because the
parents
 will not have a good
relation
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 with their
child
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children
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 especially when they will teenagers.
Moreover
, they will not have enough knowledge about a wide variety of new things in the modern era.
Additionally
, the drawback of that happening in
society
 has risen average age in the country and it will be a huge
crisis
 for the young workforce in the long run. In conclusion,
although
 there are many reasons for the increasing number of
parents
 who have a child later in their
life
, the main cause for
this
 trend might be the economic
crisis
.
Besides
this
 happening have some drawbacks for
society
 and family
life
such
 as different generations and problems among workers.
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