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The two pie charts below show changes in world population by region between 1910 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two pie charts below show changes in world population by region between 1910 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given charts illustrate the changing
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population
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 rates in different countries from 1910 to 2010.
Overall
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, Asia has the greatest
population
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 in both years
whereas
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 Latin
America
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, Africa, North
America
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 and others remained the lowest rate of all in the same period.
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, there was a growing
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 in Latin
America
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, Africa, North
America
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 and others
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 there was a slight decline in Europe and Asia
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population
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populations
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 in the same period.
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 with, in 1910, Asia has the majority of
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population
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its population
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 in 1910 and 2010. It started with a large proportion of 60% and it slightly dropped to 54% in 2010.
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, the second-greatest proportion was in Europe in the meantime. To explain more, the
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 rate of Europe moderately fell from exactly a quarter to a small portion of 14%.
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, the minority of
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population
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the population
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 was in Latin
America
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, Africa, North
America
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 and others in 1910 and 2010. The proportion was a small fraction of 15% in 1910 and
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 it almost doubled to 32% by the end of the period.
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