The graph below shows how money was spent on different forms of entertainment over a five year period. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The topic of motivation for work has merely failed to be discussed. Someone elaborate that the most significant factor is
money
while
others suppose it is not. As far as I am concerned, although
money
is of great importance, it cannot always be the most valuable one.
A comparison on
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in which
money
was spent on various types of entertainment activities in the USA when compared to Europe and Asia in 1995 and 2000 is depicted in the given chart.
Overall
, it is clear that
the money
which Americans spent on entertainment was far higher than the two regions
in both the
years.
As per the chart, publishing was the area where Correct article usage
apply
money
was spent significantly in the
all Correct article usage
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the
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regions
in both the
years. In 2000, out of the total $257 Correct article usage
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billion
, the expenditure of Americans on publications was nearly $120 billion
, which was approximately $30 billion
more than in 1995, when they spent a gross $184 billion
on entertainment.
The next area of spending was on TV. In 1995, around 25 to 30 billion
dollars were spent in Asia and Europe for this
purpose, while
in the USA; this
was nearly $50 billion
. The spending proportions climbed in all the regions
, with USA
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the USA
an
exceptional growth to hitCorrect article usage
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$
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the $
billion
mark.
Music, video and cinema were the areas where the spending was done comparatively less in these three regions
in both years at an average of 20 to 50 billion
dollars. Of this
, music was the most preferred, while
cinema was the least preferred.rather than pressure.Submitted by ahmadzm2004 on
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