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Nowadays for many people the Internet is replacing regular books. What do you think will happen in the future and what is your opinion?

#people #internet #books #future
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people
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 takes the place of
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books
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all
books
 are strong in the future as it was in the past. To being with, online
books
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book
 with a clear mind. First of all, a podcast will be
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this
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of
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book
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visual
skill
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 of ours.
in other words
, we often
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book
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casual
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.
Secondly
, most
of
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people
 who
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to
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online shopping
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books
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several times a day or uploading online
books
 does not work efficiently and sufficiently to read on the phone cause of online shopping. Despite the online resource
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books
 are still enjoyed by many
people
.
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life time
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books
does
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in some ways of developing a brain as it was in the past. That all
books
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 useful for any type of
individuals
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 or even to be a clear person.
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, the atomic habit
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written by James Clear is
favored
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 by many
people
 all around the world. If a person
who
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likes to
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book
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several times a day that can be opened detail by detail in the
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. Despite that the
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personalities
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, if a bookworm person
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 fully, they can understand the image of the context of the
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consultation
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 believe that
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 useful when 
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 stopped to listen to casually but
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real life
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books
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in
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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