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Learning English at school is often seen as more important than learning local languages. If these are not taught, many are at risk of dying out. In your opinion, is it important for everyone to learn English? Should we try to ensure the survival of local languages and, if so, how?

#english #school #languages #risk
English
 is an international language. I believe every student in Sri Lanka should
comfortable
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 with it, as their mother tongue. Some
people
 argue that it will fade their local
languages
. But, based on my point of view, I think children should have bi-lingual skills. There are so many advantages to learning
English
. The main point is,
it
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that it
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 breaks the boundaries for development. If we are fluent in
English
, we can find a job in any part of the world. It
also
 allows opportunities for higher studies in other developed countries.
Otherwise
, we will wait like frogs in well. Even in Sri Lanka, there are a lot of opportunities to expand ourselves, if are confident in
English
. Some
people
 are scared that
this
 will damage the survival of their mother tongue, but it will not. We should teach children both
languages
, from their childhood.
Then
, they will be masters of all of them. I feel it is an investment for a child for their future. I do not think that there is any threat to local
languages
 on
this
 island because
people
 use them daily for communication in society. In conclusion, I believe
people
 should be experts in as many
languages
 as much as possible,
in addition
 to their main one. It will open up many doors for success.
This
 should start at the stage of a toddler.
Then
 they will be comfortable with all
languages
 when they become adults. Parents should take responsibility for
this
 and consider it as an investment for their little ones.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global communication
  • economic opportunities
  • cultural diversity
  • endangered
  • linguistic heritage
  • inclusive
  • multilingualism
  • language revitalization
  • language policy
  • language preservation
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