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As the internet becomes more popular, newspapers are becoming a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement ?

#internet #newspapers
Newspapers
 have always
had
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been the main source of
information
 for many
,
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 until the
internet
 became more accessible and rendered
newspapers
 obsolete.
This
 is probably
due to
 the fast-growing
potentials
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 of
this
technology
, which allows users to access news content fast, from their own comfort space and
for
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free of charge. I believe that the
internet
 has enabled more people to stay up-to-date than
newspapers
 ever did before.
To begin
 with,
newspapers
 served a very important purpose for the generations before us. For those who lived during times of war, financial crisis and when
technology
 was not
peoples’
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 priority.
While
such
 living difficulties were a burden for many, people were very keen to reading and
discovering
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 what was going on around them, not just domestically but internationally too.
For example
, during
the
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WWII Europe suffered a great deal of destruction and civilians only had their local
newspapers
 to receive the
information
 about their neighbouring countries.
However
, the recent advancements in
the
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internet
technology
 have forced many of us to seek
information
 from our mobile phones, tablets or stationary computers at home. The flow of
information
 online is by far the fastest. One may even set notifications on their smartphone and stay informed instantly.
For instance
, a very recent earthquake caused massive
damages
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 and claimed the lives of many in Turkey requiring international support. Many of my friends managed to gather humanitarian aid for Turkey within a day
the
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incidence
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 had elapsed,
this
is
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highlights how fast and far the
information
 can spread via the
internet
. To recapitulate, indeed
newspapers
 used to be
very
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 effective
mean
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 of propagating
information
 from person to person.
However
,
technology
 has undoubtedly opened up a new horizon in the way we receive
information
. I completely agree that the world has moved forward and that newspaper no longer
serve
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 their purpose in the society.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Access
  • Convenient
  • Fast
  • Expensive
  • Wider range
  • News sources
  • Perspectives
  • Readership
  • Demographics
  • Physical
  • Tangible
  • Reading experience
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