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The dangers of smoking are well known, yet many people continue with this habit. They will have to spend more money than others. Do you agree or disagree to what extent

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Almost everyone is aware that smoking is injurious to
health
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 still some individuals do not change or quit their habit of smoking. Many ponder that smoking will cost more
money
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 to smokers in comparison to non-smokers. I agree with
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 statement and I will articulate it with a plausible explanation. Commence , smoking has many negative impacts on
health
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.
Firstly
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, cigarettes or any other kind of liquid smoking contains nicotine, and when
people
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 inhale that through smoking it directly affects their lungs which results in breathing issues
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 as asthma or lung cancer.
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 to
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, to cure these diseases individuals have to pay huge
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 to
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 centres. The perfect example of it is, the recent survey done by the
health
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 organisation of India which depicts that 60% population suffers from lung issues because of nicotine consumption
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 why,
people
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 who will keep smoking go to pay more
money
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 than laymen for their
health
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. Another reason for spending more
money
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 in future by the masses is that
people
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 who continue smoking will purchase more nicotine products for consumption. These products are not cheap and with the passage of time they are getting expensive so, automatically smokers will have to pay extra
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 in comparison to non-smokers.
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, in my, opinion
people
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 who are habitual of smoking will face severe effects on their
health
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 and to cure negative impacts like cough, and cancer they will have to spend
money
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 on medication
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, non-smokers will leave healthy life and they will not have to face medication expenses.
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