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Some people believe that competitive sports, both team and individual, have no place in the school curriculum. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #sports #team #place #school #curriculum
Physical education is always every student’s
favorite
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 subject.
Students
 view PE as the most relaxing and active subject because they will play
sports
 during the lessons. Many people think that there is no room for
sports
 in the
school
curriculum
 and it is a fact that most schools still
priorities
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 other
subjects
,
activities
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 more than
sports
. In my perspective, every student should choose a sport which they are interested in
to play
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 and it can be accounted as an extra
curriculum
 activity.
Sports
 are getting more important in every
school
’s
curriculum
 as they want their
students
 to be active not just only to be an academic achiever. Most
of
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the
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sports
 require teamwork so it is a great opportunity for
students
 to develop their social skills.
For instance
, one of my friends who is currently studying aboard in the USA told me that every semester she
required
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 to pick a sport to play because it is a part of her
school
’s
curriculum
.
Furthermore
, a lot of
students
 even though they struggle to achieve high grades at
school
 but
they
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are really good at
sports
 so if
sports
 become more important, those
students
 can
focus
 more on their strengths without worrying too much about their grades. Senior and Junior
students
 in the USA have the choice to choose to
focus
 on rather academically or actively in order to apply for universities.
Sports
 are not just for fun but if
students
 are good at it they can actually
focus
 on doing it.
In contrast
, most
of
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schools around the world are still prioritizing academic
subjects
 more than
sports
 and they do not view
sports
 that anything really important.
Consequently
, most
students
 will still have to
focus
 more on academic
subjects
 at
school
 and it is a drawback for
students
 who are passionate and good at playing
sports
. Being good at academic
subjects
 is still something essential because the purpose of
students
go
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 to
school
 is to learn.
Overall
,
students
 should be able to balance
out
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between academic
subjects
 and
sports
. Schools should consider making
sports
 more important as it helps
students
 to have more
opportunity
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opportunities
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 to develop social and practical skills.
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