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some people believe that the only purpose of films is to entertain. But others say films should have educational value. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #purpose #films #value
In
this
 contemporary epoch, it is a hotly-debated issue that
movies
 should just cater for recreational needs,
while
 others think that they should inform
as well as
 entertain. I am of the opinion that the
film
 industry should not simply be a source of entertainment. On the one hand, there is no denying the fact that nowadays many people watch films solely in order to be entertained. Following the trend, a lot of films have been created without any other advantage
such
 as education but entertainment. When many companies are just focusing on the income that a
film
 could make,
educational
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 purpose is no longer a key priority in some
movies
 today.
Therefore
,
this
 led to a significant increase
of
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contents
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 in the
film
 industry.
On the other hand
, I firmly agree with the view that
movies
 should be instructive and entertaining at the same time because many other values could be expanded through it. Take the Sex Education series
for
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 example,
this
 Netflix series
also
 includes life lessons,
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 methods through daily life
contents
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. These kinds of
movies
 can render several benefits in educating the young generations.
In other words
, a movie with
high quality
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 content could gain more attention from every individual including international viewers.
Beside
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entertaining
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, adding more
education
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educational
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 values could make the movie
has
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more social value and push it to another level in the
film
 industry. To encapsulate, from the aforementioned points, it is my strong reaffirmation that
beside
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 the obviously amusable benefits, their purpose should
also
 be able to widen people’s
horizon
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 about
the
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life.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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