some people believe that the only purpose of films is to entertain. But others say films should have educational value. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In
this
contemporary epoch, it is a hotly-debated issue that
movies
should just cater for recreational needs,
while
others think that they should inform
as well as
entertain. I am of the opinion that the
film
industry should not simply be a source of entertainment. On the one hand, there is no denying the fact that nowadays many people watch films solely in order to be entertained. Following the trend, a lot of films have been created without any other advantage
such
as education but entertainment. When many companies are just focusing on the income that a
film
could make,
educational
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purpose is no longer a key priority in some
movies
today.
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,
this
led to a significant increase
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in the
film
industry.
On the other hand
, I firmly agree with the view that
movies
should be instructive and entertaining at the same time because many other values could be expanded through it. Take the Sex Education series
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example,
this
Netflix series
also
includes life lessons,
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methods through daily life
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. These kinds of
movies
can render several benefits in educating the young generations.
In other words
, a movie with
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content could gain more attention from every individual including international viewers.
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entertaining
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, adding more
education
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values could make the movie
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more social value and push it to another level in the
film
industry. To encapsulate, from the aforementioned points, it is my strong reaffirmation that
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the obviously amusable benefits, their purpose should
also
be able to widen people’s
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life.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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