“Government should spend money on railway rather than roads. To what extend do you agree or disagree?”

The importance of improving
railway
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the railway
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over
roads
which was debatable has now become more controversial with many
people
claimimg
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claiming
that it is beneficial,
while
other
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others
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reject
this
notion. Both
railway
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railways
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and
roads
are essential aspects for citizens in the country.
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Although
Althought
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Although
roads
are important and many
people
in society use their
car
daily,
but
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apply
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i
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I
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believe that
railway
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the railway
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help much more residents in the cites First of all,
althought
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although
roads
are
cruial
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crucial
for
the
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apply
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car
traffic.
Railway
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Railways
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serve many
people
in the country and transport daily students to school and workers to work.
To begin
with, one of
key
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the key
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and foremost
reason
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reasons
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, public
transportation
helps all sectors of
community
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the community
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.
For instance
, students , and
employee
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employees
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can use trains ,
bus
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buses
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,and even
metro
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the metro
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for their daily activities.
Secondly
, public
transportation
save
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saves
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people
time .
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, in rush hours, using
train
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a train
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or metro saves twice the time needed to reach a location than using
personal
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a personal
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car
.
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to
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, nowadays the number of accidents
are
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is
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in rapid growth
due to
car
crush
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crash
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.
Furthermore
, death
due to
car
accidents outraced
railway
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railways
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and
according to
last
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the last
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research
conduct
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conducted
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in
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at
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the
university
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University
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of
jordan
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Jordan
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which state that cars are the most dangerous
transportation
tool. In
conculsion
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conclusion
, Both
road
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roads
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and
railway
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railways
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are important
each
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and each
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help
people
in
country
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the country
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in many ways. In my view,
i
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I
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believe
government
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the government
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might spend more
in
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on
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railway
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the railway
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over
roads
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the roads
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because it
help
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helps
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huge
people
pf
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of
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people
and is considered
as
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apply
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one of the safest
transportation
route
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routes
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.
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