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In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunities to study abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this environment? You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguements with example and relevant evidence.

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Studying in their own
country
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 was the main choice for
students
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 to opt for in the past, but in
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 day and age, many of them tend to find more opportunities by studying overseas. My reasons why I agree with the latter statement which brings about great developments to them, will be elaborated
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 with, it is sensible that in the previous
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 some
students
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 attended a domestic university because of technological advancements lacking to explore new nations for a better educational system.
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, learning from your own
country
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's resources cannot contribute to a wide range of knowledge and skill-set. Take India
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; as a developing
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 in the world is hard to be studying abroad because of the individual budget and government funds that won't be able to support them which is why it impacts its own
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 in terms of high-quality tuition.
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, overseas
students
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 might face financial crises
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 study because it cost an arm and legs to afford those courses. From
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 perspective, both ways( domestic and international) of study can bring about detrimental results in some way. On the one hand , current situations make people able to afford international curriculums in different counties as they wish.
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 the high demands of international
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 for sharing a diversity of cultures and ideas, these will extend their knowledge and connections throughout
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international universities.
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, with the optimism of staying in their own
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 ,
it is clear that
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 many
students
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 can afford the course because
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 priceless
than
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 international universities and
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 can maintain the relationship with family and friends. In conclusion,
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 it is undeniable that finishing a degree in domestic could help many people to continue absorbing basic knowledge. I am of the opinion that International universities from oversea individual will reap great benefits from it
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 as connections with a huge range of human races around the world. I personally believe that paying more money to gain an incredible experience can change a lot whether in personal or professional life.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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