In the past, shopping was a routine domestic task. Many people nowadays regards it as a hobby. To what extent do you think this is a positive trend?

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, there is a significant

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an individual’s shopping habits. Currently, people are more regarding shopping as

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interest but not a daily task. From my perspective,

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is a positive trend and there are two positive effects that

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change could bring to people. To illustrate, the first benefit could be there

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more free

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that consumers can spend

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since shopping become

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, people no longer have to devote their

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to wandering around in the markets

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, considering the

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that has been saved, citizens now are able to enjoy their

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and spend it wisely on things that they are really interested in.

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personal social

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could be expanded or even improved by

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condition, it can be easily achieved by finding a new friend or

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someone who has

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interests in shopping to shop together,

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, there are no things that are more boring than shopping alone. By sharing

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brands or

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things that want to buy,

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the relationship

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relationship

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can be built easily.

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the habits of shopping

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changed a lot, there are some good and optimistic effects which are noteworthy that can be looked forward to.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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disposable income
economic growth
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In the past, shopping was a routine domestic task. Many people nowadays regards it as a hobby. To what extent do you think this is a positive trend?

Fully explain your ideas

In some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that this is good for a country, while others believe that the government should control salaries and limit the amount people can earn. Discuss both sides and express your opinion.

Today, many people do not know their neighbors in large city. What problems does this cause? What can be done about this?

In many countries children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility. What are your opinion on this?