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The graph gives information about the consumption of fast food in the UK from 1970 to 1990.

The graph gives information about the consumption of fast food in the UK from 1970 to 1990.
The line graph depicts how often hamburgers,
fish&chips
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, and
pizza
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 were consumed by UK people in the period of 20 years. From an
overall
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 perspective, it is clearly seen that
fish&chips
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 and hamburger
consumption
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 experienced upward trends, which were
in contrast
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 to
pizza
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consumption
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. Focusing on
fish&chips
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 data, it went up gradually from around 100 (1970) to nearly 150 (1980) before increasing sharply 10 years later. The number of people who ate
fish&chips
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 reached a peak at a solid 500
at the end
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 of the period. Moving to hamburger
consumption
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, it pumped approximately nine times, starting at roughly 30 (1970) and ending at an estimated 290 (1990).
However
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, its top was still 200 lower compared to the figure for
fish&chips
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. Looking closely at
pizza
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,
while
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 the aforementioned categories climbed in 1975,
pizza
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consumption
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 began to reduce by a third in 1985 before having a slight rise in its numbers in 1990.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words fish&chips, pizza, consumption with synonyms.
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