ome people think that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters such as food, clothes and entertainment is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decision about matters that affect them. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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opportunities to be more confident and responsible, naysayers

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both views will be illustrated and followed by a decisive conclusion. Some people agree to give

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relevant to themselves (

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or arranging their spare time). The first reason coming to mind (to substantiate

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them and brings them brighter prospects.

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whatever they want without any restrictions;

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