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Children are facing more pressures nowadays from academic social and commercial perspectives. What are the causes of these pressures and what measures should be taken to reduce these pressures?

#children #pressures #perspectives #measures
Introduction.It is indisputable that most
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parents
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their
children
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this
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lots of problems and
pressures
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This
 essay intends to analyze the causes of these problems which are
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 to academic popular and commercial
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 and suggest some measures to alleviate the issue. Body1.Nowadays there are many academic
pressures
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children
 because today's
children
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pressures
by
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 their
parents
 or teacher.And so they diabolic each other.These are global issues around the world.
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 20 years ago
children
 are studied with toughness by
teacher
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.And
children
 faced
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pressures
 at
this
 time.And they could very afraid.And
children
 are limited by their
parents
.
This
 means don't freedom on
children
. Body2.The solutions are
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 difficult.
Parents
 should take care of their
children
 and
parents
 should give
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their
children
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 the
children
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 given a lot of freedom they can uneducated.And nowadays
children
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 their
parents
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 it is about study.
Parents
 want their
children
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 pressure Conclusion.To summarise today's
children
 are coming across from variety
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 . There is no doubt if
children
 go abroad in the future and study the system that educates them maybe these
pressures
 will disappear.
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 these
pressures
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children
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  • academic pressure
  • globalized world
  • competitive education system
  • social media influences
  • cyberbullying
  • commercial pressures
  • aggressive marketing
  • materialistic desires
  • peer pressure
  • high expectations
  • standardized testing
  • quantifiable performance
  • stress and anxiety
  • extracurricular achievements
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