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Housing shortages in big cities can cause serious social consequences. Some people think that only government action can solve this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Looking at the task below, which is concerning the housing shortages in big cities and its wide social consequences, is evident the way in which two several views try to prevail over each other, giving the opportunity to admit a personal idea after having made a comparison. The first view is related to the part of citizens who suppose that only the action from the
government
 can solve the problem and the reasons why several
people
 might sustain
such
 an idea as
this
 one, could be many.
For instance
, nowadays, still got the presence of
people
 without a school education, are
consequently
 brought, their unaware of their potential and
also
 as unknowing of how to act to change the future. In comparison,
on the other hand
, there are
people
 who claim that their actions in the union, can be as powerful as that of the
government
. The motivation why they believe so much can be because, being citizens of a city, they are aware of the social consequences which could arise
due to
 a lack of action. In my view, the fear and right thing to do should be to work together, in every single situation where
government
 and
people
 take part.
Therefore
, I strongly disagree with both views as in both cases we always found a singular work and never in the union. In conclusion, with what has already been discussed, it's relevant to highlight the importance of the
government
, which has to protect its citizens from futuristic consequences, making the city a safe place.
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