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Some believe that it is good for a country's culture to import films and TV programs, while others think it is better for a Country to have their own films and TV programmes. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is believed by some
that
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is
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are
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 more effective for countries to bring
foreing
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foreign
 films or TV programs,
while
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 other claims that producing their own visual
entertreinment
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entertainment
 would be paramount for each place. I do believe that the production of
movies
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 or programs may be more convenient when it comes to
gives
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citizens
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 a chance to participate in local
productions
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 On the one hand, some advocate that
movies
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 produced in another country may be more attractive for
citizens
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,
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 because some of them have more
eficient
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efficient
 sound and visual effects to improve
movies
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'
plot
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.
As a consequence
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,
such
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appeal
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 will probably make the
audience
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 more interested in what the film is about.
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, it is estimated that 4 out of 10 Brazilian
citizens
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relates
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relate
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 that are rather to watch the trilogy of Marvel´s films because of its frenetic and exciting use of visual effects in their scenes.
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, giving a chance for local people who are interested in
participate
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of
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 local tv
productions
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 would improve peoples'
behavior
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behaviour
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 toward visual arts, as it creates an immersive atmosphere that
enable
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citizen
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the citizen
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 to represent their culture through the screen.
Consequently
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,
this
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 initiative will make the local people more attracted to local
productions
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.
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, it is known that
in
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India presented a
slightly
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 increase in
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audience
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 since it started to use
their
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apply
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local people in
their
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its
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productions
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, which results in more acceptance by the population.
To conclude
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, even though importing
movies
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 or Tv
program
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programs
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 can be effective for some
type
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types
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 of
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audience
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audiences
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,
Ihold
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I hold
 my stance that giving
citizens
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 the opportunity to participate in
such
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production
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products
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 would be more
valiable
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valuable
. Ideally,
such
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choice
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a choice
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 needs to be made
indidually
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individually
 as each country has their unique
audience
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.

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