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Today more people are overweight than ever before .What in your opinion are the primary causes of this ? What are the main effects of this epidemic?

#people #effects #epidemic
In recent time, Excessive
body
 fat
have
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 been noticed in some individuals .
This
 is often caused by eating large amounts of processed or fast
food
 and drinking too much
alcohol
, which 
bring
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 about
high
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 morbidity rate and
increase
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an increase
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 in health problems.
This
 essay will discuss more about the above points and
logical
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 conclusion will be drawn in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin
 with,The main cause of obesity is consuming fast
food
. Processed
meal
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are always altered in some way during preparation and they are often associated with unhealthy levels of added sugar,sodium and fat .People nowadays prefer eating out
alot
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a lot
due to
 their tight schedules or laziness to cook.
For instance
 ,a Doctor who covers
24hours
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24-hour
 call duty and still
have
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 to resume duty that same morning for his day duty got home tired without having anything to eat at home ,he moved out to get
food
 from
nearby
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a nearby
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 restaurant and
this
 continues for about a month definitely sugar,sodium and fat will continue to store up in his
body
 and
this
 will lead to accumulation of  excess fats in the
body
 . Moreso, Another cause is
excessive
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the excessive
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 intake of
alcohol
 ,it has become rampant among individuals these days meanwhile, many people count
alcohol
 intake as part of enjoyment or a way of eradicating depression .
Thus
 ,it causes more harm than good by building up high calories in the
body
 and some
heath
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health
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 issues can arise
such
 as high blood pressure, heart disease, stroke, liver disease, and digestive problems.
For instance
, A 25year old man  who was influenced by his peers became addicted to taking
of
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alcohol
everyday
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 and a few months later he developed some health issues associated with excessive fat
due to
 the high calories present in
alcohol
.
To conclude
with
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,Consuming processed
food
 and taking too much
of
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alcohol
 are driving
force
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 of Obesity nowadays  and
it
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they
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 bring about
increase
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an increase
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 in morbidity rate and serious health problems .
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