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There has been an increase in the use of technology globally and some said teacher last will be replaced by technology in the classroom.Do you agree or disagree

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There has been an increase in the use of technology globally, and many predicted that
teachers
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 may be replaced by Robots in the classroom. I strongly disagree
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 because it’s going to cause unemployment for many
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 and would increase the rate of indiscipline among
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 essay will explicate these with relevant examples and a logical conclusion. The impact of
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 cannot be overlooked in the society today.They are like parents to us and they need to be maintained in the educational sector.They sacrifice their time to impact
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students
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.So many sleepless nights,in order to prepare for class the next morning.All these sacrifices cannot be overlooked. Replacing them with robots will cause them to lose their jobs and
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 can affect them psychologically.They have to start looking
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 means of income which might not be easy for them.
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 will cause an increase in the rate of indiscipline among
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.
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 can never be the same.
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,we have serious and unserious
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.But with the help of
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 they can be monitored and advised to change either by punishment or speaking to them.But with the help of robots,can all these be done?No.Most
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 are born with these skills and they’re very good
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 handling children and adults because they’re human. In conclusion,technology should not replace
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 as it will not only affect
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 and
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society because there would be
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 high rate of unemployment in
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