The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph shows trends in
shop
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closures
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and
openings
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in one country from 2011 to 2018.
Overall
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, both the
number
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of shops that closed and the
number
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that opened depicted large fluctuations during the particular period of
the
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time.
However
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,
closures
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had surpassed
openings
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in
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at
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the end of the period To start with, in 2011, the
shop
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openings
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reached
its
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their
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peak at 8,500
stores
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after which decreased sharply to 4,000,
while
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the
shop
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closures
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drop slightly to 6,000 in 2012 which beat the
number
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of
shop
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/ shops opened. After 2012,
on the other hand
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, both of the
number
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shops that closed and opened increased except for the
shop
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closures
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in 2014. In 2015, the
shop
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closures
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fell to
its
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their
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lowest point
which
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below 1,000
stores
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,
whereas
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the
shop
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openings
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went down
at
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to 4,000
stores
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that
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not as lowest as the
shop
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closures
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. The following year the
closures
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shop
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fluctuated between 5100 and 5000
stores
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,
in contrast
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with the
openings
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shop
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which was steady for three years and ended with declined to
the
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its smallest point.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 85%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words shop, closures, openings, number, stores with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail landscape
  • net growth
  • market dynamics
  • economic indicators
  • fluctuations
  • pivotal
  • consumption patterns
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • downward/upward trend
  • stabilize
  • recession
  • boom
  • retail sector
  • closure rate
  • inauguration/opening rate
  • consumer market
  • saturate
  • commercial viability
  • profitability
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