The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph shows trends in
shop
closures
and openings
in one country from 2011 to 2018. Overall
, both the number
of shops that closed and the number
that opened depicted large fluctuations during the particular period of the
time. Correct article usage
apply
However
, closures
had surpassed openings
in
the end of the period
To start with, in 2011, the Change the preposition
at
shop
openings
reached its
peak at 8,500 Correct pronoun usage
their
stores
after which decreased sharply to 4,000, while
the shop
closures
drop slightly to 6,000 in 2012 which beat the number
of shop
/ shops opened. After 2012, on the other hand
, both of the number
shops that closed and opened increased except for the shop
closures
in 2014.
In 2015, the shop
closures
fell to its
lowest point Correct pronoun usage
their
which
below 1,000 Correct pronoun usage
apply
stores
, whereas
the shop
openings
went down at
to 4,000 Change preposition
apply
stores
that
not as lowest as the Correct pronoun usage
apply
shop
closures
. The following year the closures
shop
fluctuated between 5100 and 5000 stores
, in contrast
with the openings
shop
which was steady for three years and ended with declined to the
its smallest point.Remove the article
apply
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Vocabulary: Replace the words shop, closures, openings, number, stores with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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