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Is freedom of speech vital in free society how far do you agree

#freedom #speech #society
One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is the necessity of the right to speak in an independent society. Personally, I tend to think that the liberty of speech is valuable for the community
due to
 the
facts
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 that the freedom of expression leads to the state's evolution and the absence of
this
 phenomenon encourages the vanishing of the justice system.
Firstly
, it is well known that in the case of every citizen having
an
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autonomy of choice, it contributes to the government's progress. What I mean here is that the authorities must perform improvements if the civilians have a right to speak about the community issues which positively impacts the prosperity of the country.
Otherwise
, the governance will not have a vision of problems as the locals are out of the opportunity to put a light
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 those obstacles. A good case in point is a comparison of two powers the USA and the USSR. Compared to the USSR, the USA has given their people full freedom of speech and
as a result
, the USA is still leading the top
of
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advanced countries in the world whilst the USSR
is
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collapsed years ago. The other aspect of
this
 problem to discuss is that the justice system cannot exist if the state has the power to close the mouth of the population. As long as the people cannot stand for themselves, the authorities will not have a pathway to see
this
 matter through the perspectives of these individuals. Take North Korea
for example
 which differs from other modern countries by deprivation of
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rights
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 to speak.
Consequently
, the community is suffering from unfairness, because the person can be quilted for things that are adequate in unrelated countries. In conclusion, we can say that for
development
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 of the government and
existion
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existing
 of the average justice
system
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 the right to voice one’s opinion is considerably crucial.
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