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Some people say that success is "10 percent talent and 90 percent hard work". Is hard work the key of success, or is talent also important?

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Some people argue that fortune is "10
percent
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talent
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 and 90
percent
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 hard
work
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". I strongly believe that there are pros and cons of both sides. In the following
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 I will give some examples. In the first place, nowadays, some individuals think that success is a little bit
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talent
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of talent
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 and more
work
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 hard, but some do not think so. First and foremost, when it comes to
talent
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, is
power
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the power
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 of our life.
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, if a person has
a
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potential, she or he can achieve their goals easily.
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,
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gift
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the gift
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 is
unique
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 skill and not much mankind
have
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. It is a
such
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 thing it can
brings
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 plenty of achievements and happiness to people.
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, it is common knowledge that everyone has a hidden ability. They must just look for
from
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themselves and learn something to see their
talent
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. So,
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gift
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the gift
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 is
crucial
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the crucial
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 key
of
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 success as well.
On the other hand
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,
secondly
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 when it comes to hard
work
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, is important in fortune.
This
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 is because everyone knows that when we
work
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 hard we can achieve our targets. Like it is "no money no honey". So, if a person works hard who can do anything else either without any help or who does not need any
gift
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.
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, you have not to rely solely on hard
work
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 or your potential.
This
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 is because you may not know which is more you have and more crucial.
To sum up
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, as you already know, both sides are equal.
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, it is my perception that just not rely only on
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gift
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the gift
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 of
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work
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working
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 hard, just
look
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looking
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 for it from you and keep learning is the best key
of
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to
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 success.
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