The given line graph illustrates the average data of a museum tourists in both summer and winter in the year 2003. Overall, it is observed that during summer, the museum had many visitors compared to winter. To begin with, the highest visits recorded were of about 1600 people to the museum at 12noon during the hot weather which declined to 800 people at 4pm. Whereas in winter about 500 visitors came at 10am which somewhat fluctuate till 12 noon. However, there was massive declined during the winter at 12noon till around 2pm whereas there was no visitors recorded from 2pm till 6pm unlike during summer, the downward trend was only from 4pm and there was no record of no visitors.

The given line graph illustrates the average data of a museum tourists in both summer and winter in the year 2003.

Overall, it is observed that during summer, the museum had many visitors compared to winter.

To begin with, the highest visits recorded were of about 1600 people to the museum at 12noon during the hot weather which declined to 800 people at 4pm. Whereas in winter about 500 visitors came at 10am  which somewhat fluctuate till 12 noon.

However, there was massive declined during the winter at 12noon till around 2pm whereas there was no visitors recorded from 2pm till 6pm unlike during summer,  the downward trend was only from 4pm and there was no record of no visitors.
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The given line graph illustrates the average data of museum tourists in both summer and
winter
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in the year 2003.
Overall
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, it is observed that during summer, the museum had many
visitors
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compared to
winter
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.
To begin
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of about 1600 people to the museum at 12noon during the hot weather which declined to 800 people at 4pm.
Whereas
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in
winter
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about 500
visitors
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came at 10am which somewhat fluctuate till 12 noon.
However
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, there was a massive decline during the
winter
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from 12 noon till around 2pm but there were no
visitors
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recorded from 2pm till 6pm unlike during summer, the downward trend was only from 4pm and there was no record of no
visitors
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.
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