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Many young people today will never be able to afford to buy a house. What has led to this situation? What can be done to remedy it?

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The young generation seems incapable of purchasing a
house
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 nowadays.
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 essay will discuss the most important reason and solutions. From my point of view, inflation is the fundamental cause of
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 problem. Years ago our grandparents' income was more than enough,
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, an employee can barely meet his expenses with his salary now.
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, in 1993 a two-bedroom
house
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 in the city center was mere 5,000 dollars
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 the monthly income was $500.
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 a
mid-leveled
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 person could have
buy
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bought
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 a
house
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 in only 10 months.
Comparing
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 to now, it takes over 10 years to afford a mediocre apartment. So
that
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, it's not only getting easier to buy a
house
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 but
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 getting more difficult. In a nutshell, inflation made being a
house
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 owner a dream for many individuals In my opinion, to overcome
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 issue low-interest bank loans and subsidies will be the most effective ways. Banks can offer a long-term payment and facilitate the
installments
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instalments
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. Governments
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 can plan to dedicate an amount of money for eligible people like families of four who are in need. If the government isn't able to take control of inflation, the officials can at least provide some beneficial support programs to aid people in need. In conclusion, the next generation will be struggling with the housing problem even more if we don't make a logical and efficient plan for
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 problem.

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