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The first chart shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emission which result from this energy use

The first chart shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emission which result from this energy use
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The pie charts depict the consumption of
energy
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 and products of
energy
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 utilized by homes in Australia.
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, heating consumes almost half of the
energy
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while
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 water heating emits more gases. The household
energy
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 used for heating is about two- fifth, less than a third is used for water heating and about a fifth
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energy
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of energy
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 is for other appliances. Refrigeration, heating and cooling used the remaining 14% of
energy
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 to function. There is 32% of gas emission when boiling water which is almost the same as the
energy
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 used. The
vapor
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vapour
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 released when other appliances are in use is more than a quarter and less than a fifth from refrigeration. A quarter of greenhouse gas is emitted from heating, cooling and lightening.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words energy with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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