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people that lives in 21st century have better quality life than people lived in previous time. Agree or disagree.

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I completely agree that people are well off today compared to life in earlier centuries.I will support
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, people were engulfed in war in the previous century and, there was vast migration between continents which not only make conditions worse but will be starting from scratch in uncertainty. examples we can look at are
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 Vietnam's emigration to the united states in the late 70s. Another factor to look at is viral diseases spreading across countries causing massive pandemics in the early 19 century in Europe.Today science is better equipped with swift testing and inventing new vaccines in comparison to the past century, So even if the disease cannot be cured its spread is easily controlled with avoidance measures.Diagnosing virus types and, how they spread aid medical practitioners in identification and prevention. Daily chores have become hyper-efficient with technological utilities like refrigeration and cleaning.
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