A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children sports team for two years, or to pay for two open air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public. Write a letter to the company. In your letter: 1) describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team. 2) summarize the benefits of paying for the concerts. 3) saying how you think the company should spend that money.

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Dear Sir/Madam, I hope

this

letter will find you in good health and high spirits. I am writing

this

letter with regard to the feedback your company asked from the public of Central

park

housing society. I would appreciate it if you could spare a few moments to consider my opinion.

Firstly

, I would like to provide some background information on arranging a

concert

in open-air or sponsoring a

children

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children's

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sport. Both of them have benefits for

people

of different age groups. The situation prompted me to reach out to you for seeking support. I would like to highlight some key points regarding supporting the

children

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children's

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sports

team

for two years. There is a

team

cricket

team

at Lahore grammar school

who

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that

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performs very well and every year trophy in inter-school competitions between different schools situated at central

park

housing society.

Moreover

, they have very brilliant talent in their

team

especially I will mention two players, one 11-year-old batsman named Abaan Sikandar and the other

13 year old

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Orhan Ali Shaukat. Sponsoring the

team

will help them excel in their career and the

team

will play between popular schools in the country and brighten the name of our area.

Secondly

, arranging an open-air

concert

will help many

people

of different ages to attend the event and enjoy the night and party.

Furthermore

this

will help them to make time in their busy life does socializing. Considering the aforementioned factors, I Kindly request to arrange an open-air

concert

for the community of Central

park

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. I believe that

people

do not have much time to socialize, and parents do not have many places to take some valuable place so

this

move,

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apply

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will be a great place to meet new

people

and children can enjoy the music.

Additionally

, I would be grateful if you provide dinner after the

concert

people

can enjoy it in a better way. In conclusion, I sincerely appreciate your attention to

this

matter, and I am confident that with your support, the community of Central

Park

will have a fascinating and beautiful night. I would be more than willing to discuss

further

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or any additional information if necessary. Thank you for your time and consideration. Yours faithfully, Muhammad Rizwan Shaukat.

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Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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4
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

373 words

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