With the increase in computer use, many people feel that schools do not need to put the emphasis that they used to on basic handwriting skills or mathematics skills. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is commonly argued that
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don’t
need to put the emphasis on basic handwriting
skills
or mathematics
skills
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. Personally, I completely disagree with
this
view for a variety of reasons. First of all, everyone shouldn’t depend strongly on
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.
This
is because
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always work but our
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and job
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. In fact, complete dependence on
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will make our life be
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so much, many
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plans can be slowed down.
For example
, 2 months ago I and my team were given
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about a national festival and the score
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that homework would be our periodic score, we have to put all of
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into a document and give it to my teacher on next meeting, at that
time
we should handwriting all but we put it into a file,
however
when we have to give it to my teacher that file was
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and we were lost 2 points
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error.
Secondly
, sometimes we need to
self-calculate
to improve our
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and personal skill and bringing a calculator or
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everywhere never be a good and comfortable way.
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means that at many places we can’t bring
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to, it’s so uncomfortable when we always need to bring that and if we
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a long
time
it will make our ability to calculate
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disappear. In fact, dependence on
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or calculator is good for
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For example
,
acording
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experiment Adam, who is an excellent student,
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self-calculate
and just use
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for a long
time
, after 3 years he lost his ability to
self-calculate
so many scientists believe after a long
time
we
don’t
self-calculate
will make our ability to calculate be disappear. In conclusion, we shouldn’t depend completely on
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handwriting
skills
or mathematics
skills
is decreased at school by anyone.
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