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With the increase in computer use, many people feel that schools do not need to put the emphasis that they used to on basic handwriting skills or mathematics skills. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is commonly argued that
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don’t
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 or mathematics
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due to
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 the increase in
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. Personally, I completely disagree with
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 view for a variety of reasons. First of all, everyone shouldn’t depend strongly on
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don’t
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 always work but our
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 and job
aren’t stop
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. In fact, complete dependence on
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 will make our life be
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 so much, many
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 plans can be slowed down.
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, 2 months ago I and my team were given
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homework is search
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 about a national festival and the score
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for
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 that homework would be our periodic score, we have to put all of
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 into a document and give it to my teacher on next meeting, at that
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 we should handwriting all but we put it into a file,
however
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 when we have to give it to my teacher that file was
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 and we were lost 2 points
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 error.
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, sometimes we need to
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 to improve our
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intelligence
 and personal skill and bringing a calculator or
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to
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everywhere never be a good and comfortable way.
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 means that at many places we can’t bring
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 to, it’s so uncomfortable when we always need to bring that and if we
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 calculate
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 a long
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 it will make our ability to calculate
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disappear. In fact, dependence on
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 or calculator is good for
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.
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,
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according
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 experiment Adam, who is an excellent student,
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self-calculate
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 and just use
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 for a long
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, after 3 years he lost his ability to
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 so many scientists believe after a long
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self-calculate
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 will make our ability to calculate be disappear. In conclusion, we shouldn’t depend completely on
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. In my opinion, I disagree when the emphasis
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 handwriting
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 or mathematics
skills
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 is decreased at school by anyone.
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