Nowadays some older people choose to live in retirement communities and centers with other people, rather than living with their adult children. Is this a positive or negative development?

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In
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recent century,
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is increasingly popular for elders to spend their
last
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years of life in retirement Communities and centres with other Society members
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of spending their days with their grown-up children. In my opinion,
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is a positive trend
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the reasons which will be discussed below. I believe the first reason is turning the days,
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, the new generation does not understand their parents' words and being in some centres for elders makes a contribution to staying calm for them.
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, grandparents can have some rest after working all day long for about 30 years! These places can bring peace to them by being in contact with their own generation of people. By the way of example, my grandfather always fought with my father and anger has an axial role in a heart attack. The second reason's background is health and financial problems. In these centres, nurses take care of them and
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plays a key role in the elder's life length. After all, nurses are trained to do emergency activities when members need these kinds of activities.
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to the normal people that are not trained. Moving on, the bills of someplace like
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are less than usual daily life. But all the facilities are reachable. Just for a little example, I know a hospital that has MRI and every medical thing is needed for taking care of
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group and has low prices because of insurance coverage.
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, these were my reasons for the opinion why grandparents choice is living in retirement communities with their same age fellowmen
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of living in their home with youngsters.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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