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The chart above shows information about various professions in the U.K. and their salaries. The table shows the average working hours per week for each profession Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The chart above shows information about various professions in the U.K. and their salaries. The table shows the average working hours per week for each profession Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
#information #professions #k #salaries #hours #week #profession #report #university #lecturer #summarise #features #comparisons
The data
shown
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 as
column
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 bar chart and table,which compares (in pounds and working
hours
 each week) the monthly wage for different duties at two different
stage
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stages
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: fresher and having 3 years of
experiences
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experience
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.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that
while
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underground drivers
work
less
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hours
 per week compared to
firefighter
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a firefighter
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 who works more but
earn
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 less money In more
details
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detail
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, Firefighter works
highest
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 number of
hours
 with an average of
hours
 55 compared to underground drivers who
work
 for 36
hours
 only . Closely analyzing the table, which shows that police officers and nurses
work
in
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similar
work
hour
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hours
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 per week 40 and 38 respectively Interestingly, The average income for underground drivers is the highest with about 50000
pound
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pounds
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 for
fresher
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freshers
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 and 51000
pound
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pounds
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 for
3 year
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3-year
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 experience
officer
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officers
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. The least amount of money received among these duties is
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a nurse
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nurse
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nurses
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 who
receive
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 approximately 180000
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yearly
yealy
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yearly
 for
graduate
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graduates
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 and 19000 for
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a nurse
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nurse
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nurses
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 with experiences
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, work with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 3 times.
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