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The two tables below show the exchange students from universities in Europe to Australia between 2007 and 2009. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two tables below show the exchange students from universities in Europe to Australia between 2007 and 2009. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The data
shown
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 as
a
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two tables which compare the
number
 of exchange candidates from European universities to Australia and the opposite in over 3 years ending in
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the
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span between 2007 and 2009
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that total the
number
 of
students
 coming to Australia is increasing sharply
staring
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starting
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 with 189
students
reaching
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and reaching
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 226 candidates in 2009.
While
students
 going
in
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to
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 Europe to attend
universitiesfor
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universities for
universities
 studying is
isteadly
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steadily
steady
 constant,which is n equilibrium
number
 for about 152 over the
in
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period
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 between 2007 and 2009 In more
details
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detail
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. AlthoughtAlthough French and
Netherland
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Netherlands
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 candidates
students
 who want to study in Australia remain
stableconstant
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stable constant
.
Tthe
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number
 of
student
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students
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 from Germany and Sweden increases from 27 to 62 and from 24 to 42 respectively.
Wwhile
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While
 British
student
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students
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 studying in European universities are the least among other countries. Interestingly,
students
 from France and Germany aim to study
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approximately
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 about 9 and 8
students
 respectively,
while
 the
number
 of
students
 in Sweden ,
united
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the united
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 kingdom, and
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 dropped
with
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 an average of 9
students
 between 2007 and 2009.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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