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Some think secondary and high school students should be allowed to choose academic courses leading to university or practical courses leading to careers such as carpenters. To what extent do you agree or disagree？

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Choosing the right career path is often discussed with
students
 at the secondary and high school levels.
This
 is the year that they have to decide what program they wanted to pursue in the next higher education. In my opinion,
students
 should have the voice to select the academic courses they believe they will excel in and help them prepare for entering
university
 with the guidance of their parents and teachers.
Firstly
, allowing the
students
 to select the subject based on their capabilities and specialization helps them excel in their craft.
For example
,
student
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a student
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 who excels and loves mathematics can easily choose a program in engineering or science.
On the other hand
, the student who barely liked those
subjects
may be
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 more inclined to arts and literature.
Secondly
,
university
 degree
subjects
 are more complex and difficult that focus on specific careers
hence
 a pre-requisite subject must be taken by the
students
. These requirements should be offered at secondary and high school levels as preparation for their next studies. For medical technology aspirants
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 instance, additional chemistry
subjects
 can be taken to prepare them more on the
university
 level.
Additionally
, the choices of the
students
 can
also
 be discussed with their parents and school advisors for better guidance. The
students
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 decision about the subject they select has a great impact on the succeeding level of education. In conclusion, I strongly agree that
students
 should be given the opportunity to select the
subjects
 they need as preparation for their college and
university
 degrees.
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