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Education is not a luxury, but a basic human right and such should be free for everyone irrespective of personal wealth. Do you agree or disagree?

#education #luxury #right #wealth
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Access to
education
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 has long been considered to be a fundamental human right
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 essential for personal and social development.
However
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, the cost of
education
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 can be a significant barrier for many people.
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, there is an ongoing debate about whether
education
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 should be free for all or not. I agree that
education
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 should be free for everyone, as it is
basic
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 human right and can contribute economic wealth to the country. First of all,
education
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 is a basic human right and should not be limited only to those who can afford it. It is believed that
education
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 is the key to one’s happy life.
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, not giving access to
education
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for
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 people who are financially poor can be considered
as
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a violation of their basic human rights.
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, presenting free
education
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 for all people can provide a benefit to the whole society.
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,
educated
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 society can contribute to economic growth as it has
wider
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world view
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 and
better
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 aware of everything
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 going around.
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, the government can ensure better
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 growth in the country by making
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education
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 free for all.
To sum up
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, it is commonly agreed that
education
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 is not a luxury and should be free of charge. By providing free
education
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, the government can secure
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 rights of its
citizen’s
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citizens
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 and lead the country to
the
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prosperity. After
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 analysis
on
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this
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 subject, it is predicted that the government will do everything in its power to maintain free
education
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 for each segment of the population not to lag behind other countries.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fundamental right
  • accessible
  • social mobility
  • personal and professional development
  • overall development
  • equality
  • social disparities
  • access
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