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Foreign visitors should pay more than local visitors for cultural and historical attractions. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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It is sometimes argued that tourists from overseas should be charged more than local residents to visit important
sites
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 and monuments.
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, I completely disagree with
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 idea. The argument in favour of higher prices for foreign tourists would be those cultural or historical attractions often depend on state subsidies to keep them going, which means that the resident population already pays money to these
sites
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 through the tax system.
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,
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 is a very shortsighted view because foreign tourists contribute to the economy of the host
country
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 with the money they spend on a wide range of goods and services, including food, souvenirs, accommodation and travel. The governments and inhabitants of every
country
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 should be happy to subsidise important tourist
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 and encourage people from the rest of the world to visit them. If travellers realised that they would have to pay more to visit historical and cultural attractions in a particular nation, they would perhaps decide not to go to that
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 on holiday. To take the UK as an example, the tourism industry and many related jobs rely on visitors coming to the
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 to see places like Windsor Castle or Saint Paul’s Cathedral. These two
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 charge the same price regardless of nationality, and
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 helps to promote the nation’s cultural heritage. If overseas travellers stopped coming
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 the higher prices, there would be a risk of insufficient funding for the maintenance of these important buildings. In conclusion, I believe that every effort should be made to attract visitors from overseas, and it would be counterproductive to make them pay more than local residents.
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