The first chart below shows the results of a survey which sampled a cross-section of 100,000 people asking if they traveled abroad and why they traveled for the period 1994-98.

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The table chart represents the number of visits abroad by

citizens

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for

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different purposes between 1994 and 1998

while

the line graph illustrates their favourite areas in the same years. It can be seen clearly that the figure for holidaymakers experienced an upward trend from 1994 to 1998.

Moreover

, the rate for visitors who travelled to other countries on their holiday accounted for the highest proportion of travellers among other reasons.

In addition

, the majority of visitors opted for Western Europe, followed by North America during the same period. In terms of the motivation to travel, the figure for

residents who travelled on their vacation maintained their dominance over the five years, accounting for three-thirds of

visitors.

This

was followed by the number of

citizens who opted for foreign nations

due to

their business.

Furthermore

according to

the below chart, Western Europe was the top most popular destination for

tourists, which had approximately 20000 holidaymakers

while

North America was the second place of their liking with just above 1000

tourists choosing to travel over the surveyed years.

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