The first chart below shows the results of a survey which sampled a cross-section of 100,000 people asking if they traveled abroad and why they traveled for the period 1994-98.

The first chart below shows the results of a survey which sampled a cross-section of 100,000 people asking if they traveled abroad and why they traveled for the period 1994-98.
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The table chart represents the number of visits abroad by
UK
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citizens
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different purposes between 1994 and 1998
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the line graph illustrates their favourite areas in the same years. It can be seen clearly that the figure for holidaymakers experienced an upward trend from 1994 to 1998.
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, the rate for visitors who travelled to other countries on their holiday accounted for the highest proportion of travellers among other reasons.
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, the majority of visitors opted for Western Europe, followed by North America during the same period. In terms of the motivation to travel, the figure for
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residents who travelled on their vacation maintained their dominance over the five years, accounting for three-thirds of
UK
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visitors.
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was followed by the number of
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citizens who opted for foreign nations
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their business.
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the below chart, Western Europe was the top most popular destination for
UK
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tourists, which had approximately 20000 holidaymakers
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North America was the second place of their liking with just above 1000
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tourists choosing to travel over the surveyed years.
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