You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Some people think young people should be required to have full time education until they are at least 18 years old. To what extent do you agree or disagree? You should write at least 250 words.

It is argued that some say that youngth must learn all
education
system until they will turn 18
years
old.
This
essay totally disagrees with that statement because they just do not have time to study a full-time
education
and nothing is limiting them to study after 18
years
.
Firstly
, for students, a time
that is
until 18, can not be enough to educate them about everything, and we do not say about learning them completely. Of course, some children can be very intelligent and can learn everything within
this
given period, but we
also
should remember that other teenagers do not have
such
a talent.
For example
, my brother Arlan is a very clever child and he graduated the school at 12
years
old. If you compare me that do not have any good grades in school and him,
it is clear that
there decides ability of the child.
Secondly
, a person can easily learn things
after
this
age. There is no need to hurry somewhere and we can study with enjoy ourselves and with pleasant.
For instance
, the scientists from China do research. In
this
experiment, they took interviews from the wealthy
people
and the
people
that had poverty problems and they noticed that the rich
people
started their real
education
life after 20
years
. In conclusion, some
people
believe that adolescents get every
education
topic until they turn 18
years
old, but
this
is not a tough rule, because getting everything from lessons can be difficult for some students and
people
easily can learn things that they love
after
this
age.
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task achievement
You address the task and provide relevant arguments but ensure to further elaborate your examples and clarify your points. For example, specify what types of education continue after age 18.
coherence cohesion
Improve logical flow by ensuring that all parts of the essay connect smoothly. Linking words and phrases can enhance cohesion in your writing.
task achievement
Your introduction sets up the topic clearly.
coherence cohesion
Introduction and conclusion are clearly present, summarizing your main points well.

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