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Some experts belive that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at a primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages.

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It has become a popular trend that children are encouraged to learn another
language
 at
their
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early age
while
 some argue s that learning a foreign
language
 at the secondary
level
 has more benefits than at the primary
level
. I will discuss both advantages and disadvantages
as well as
 compare them with feasible reasons before coming to a final conclusion. To commence with, the darker side, learning a foreign
language
 at an early age is that it could be an extra burden for kids as their curriculum include many subjects like maths
,
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 and Urdu literature.
Secondly
, teachers may not experts in another
language
 so pupils got confused and mix up both languages. On the bright side, the obvious benefits of learning a foreign
language
 are that it helps to sharpen their minds for learning new things faster speed as compared with the secondary
level
. At the secondary ,
level
 students have already burdened with heavy subjects
such
 as physics, chemistry, biology and so on.
Therefore
, youngsters can easily pick up a second
language
 without any hesitation.
This
 process can give good exposure to different cultures and can adapt them in their daily lives and become a good person.
As a result
, they can assess any international jobs and business deals.
For instance
, one of my cousin's sisters learning
the
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Chinese terminology since her childhood and at present time she is working in multi-national companies and making proud to her parents.
To conclude
, learning another vocabulary at an early age brings demerits
as well as
 merits but its positive effects are more than negative sides.
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