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The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart illustrates an evaluation of a survey about the number of questions that were received by a tourist information company in a region from January to June 2011. The data is categorised by three different ways of contacting the office (in person, by letter, and by telephone).
Overall
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, the number of
people
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 who were individually going to the information centre experienced a soar.
Moreover
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, it had the lowest starting point but managed to have the highest figures in June compared to the other two methods. One of the most striking features is that the majority of
people
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 in January were asking by telephone (900
people
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).
However
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, in February, it decreased slightly to 800 but quickly recovered the next month and continuously increased. Meanwhile, the number of
people
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 that were sending emails to the office dropped which was followed by a period of stability.
On the other hand
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, the least interested option (personally coming to the centre) surpassed the other two trendlines within 4 months, particularly, in April.
Furthermore
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, it reached a peak of almost 2000
people
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 in June.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • number of inquiries
  • Tourist Information Office
  • six-month period
  • increased steadily
  • reached a peak
  • decreased slightly
  • increased dramatically
  • experienced a gradual decline
  • general trend
  • highest number
  • lowest number
  • significant increase
  • tourism interest
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